lunes, 23 de junio de 2008

Rafael`s description

Rafael was mad but nobody knows wy. Before he went mad he was a good looking kid, son of a fisherman, but then his father was killed by a shark, that doesn`t change him but now he was a poor boy that that needs that the people in the vilage helps him and his mother, but he still was a good looking kid. wen he could he start working as a fisherman like his father after some time he fell in love with Anita, the most beautyful daughter that Rodigo had so he go away for six month and he came back with a golden ring for Anita. Her father do not aprove his love. One thay Anita run away with the soldier, that was a traveler man that knew the world and in other times he comes to the vilage twice a week after that, everybody thinks that Rafael went mad.

1 comentario:

Susan Zilberstein dijo...

Good job, Patricio! Please pay attention to the length of your sentences and change: "... and that changed him...that needed the people in the village helped ..." "When...started...father.After... beautiful...went away...months ..." "father didn't approve of..." "...day... ran ... traveller who knew ...he came...village...After that...thought..."